💡 Meet Aisha. Aisha is a final year student at Ko University with a passion for data. In addition to her university coursework, she's taken numerous online data courses. When Aisha hears about a Data Analyst internship at Newcastle Partners, she reviews the technical requirements and her qualifications are a great fit. The application requires submitting a resume and cover letter. Aisha hates writing, and she quickly cobbles together a cover letter to submit. Below is a copy of her cover letter.
Emily, the hiring manager at Newcastle Partners, is tasked with evaluating candidates for the internship. Her applicant tracking system shortlists 25 candidates based on their resume, including Aisha. Emily then reads and evaluates the cover letters for the shortlisted candidates. After reading Aisha's cover letter, she rejects her application. See below for Emily's notes on Aisha.
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Impersonal: generic, flowery language, maybe AI generated?
Grammar: numerous grammatical errors, spells company name wrong and awkward sentence structure
Research: does not seem to have done any research into Newcastle and what we do. This could be for any company.